Revise your multi-paragraph explanatory essay using formal writing style, technical language, and transitional words. Use the following checklist to ensure that all the requirements are in place: Underline the thesis statement in the introductory paragraph. Underline the topic sentence in each body paragraph. Circle the supporting evidence used in the body paragraphs. Count the number of transition words used in each paragraph. Underline the restatement in the concluding paragraph.

1. Write the essay topic: Traveling, this essay describes the nature on the Kenai Peninsula and what the author sees from his/her car.

2. Underline the topic sentence for each paragraph or write the Implied topic sentence here:

Spawn during their trek from trek from the ocean, the color of their bodies has been transformed from the silver to deep scarlet. This sentence talks about the salmon, because they are silver color and live in the ocean but once they are ready to reproduce, they turn red and they swim up the river where they where born. More than once , we come around a curve and happen upon moose besides the road. The size of these animals is starting. They just chew their cud and watch us go by. The topic sentence of this paragraph tells us how the author sees the big moose beside the road, and how stunning that is. Remember a moose can be as big ad 6.5 feet tall. At one point we exit the highway . we drive a few miles and come face - to face face with an ancient millions of years old glacier and the icebergs that it calves. We see icebergs as big as house in a - above - freezing lake within walking distances of the highway. by Alaska . The Kenai Peninsula . Summer. Wow. This last paragraph describes the amazing, and extraordinary, feeling that the author has when he/she sees the glacier from his car and how close it is.

3. write the idea that all the topic sentences have in common: All the topic sentences describe the sight that the author has from his car and how splendid, and close, nature is.

4. Write your own sentence that includes the essay topic and the idea that the topic sentence have in common: Traveling is a great chance to get close to nature, even while driving in some places, like the Kenai peninsula, we are able to see how marvelous nature is.