So I wrote a song a while ago about this relationship I was in that was toxic and I revised it a little today and I just thought idk...maybe you guys could give me some advice? Also I suck at melody and stuff so its kinda just a rewrite of Time After Time-
anyways-
Lying in my bed I hear,
Some sad sh*t and think of you
Chasing in circles,
Confusion is nothing new
Flashback, old fights
She was on your side
A cereal box of memories
I wish I could rewind
You picture me, I'm perfect
You talk to her, and I'm a monster
I'm reaching out
Cuz I can't realize
Then you say, "I love you."
While telling her, "you're mine."
The second hand unwinds.
If you're lost and you look but you can't find me,
Just know I tried
If you fall, and I don't catch you, it's because I was waiting
Waiting for you to try
If you're lost and you look but you can't find me,
Just know I tried
If you fall, and I don't catch you, it's because I was waiting
Waiting for you to try
After all the damage was done,
and my world turned into gray
That's what you decide to care,
Wondering if I'm okay
And out of fear of you ,
I say I'm fine.
The drum beats out of time
If you're lost and you look but you can't find me,
Just know I tried
If you fall, and I don't catch you, it's because I was waiting
Waiting for you to try
You say, "I'm sorry."
While telling her that I made you cry
If you're lost and you look but you can't find me,
Just know I tried
If you fall, and I don't catch you, it's because I was waiting
Waiting for you to try
If you're lost and you look but you can't find me,
Just know I tried
If you fall, and I don't catch you, it's because I was waiting
Waiting for you to try
I'm so tired of trying.
It's a pretty garbage song but I'm also not a songwriter so it doesn't really matter but, one day I wanna sing this to the guy it's about.
By the way, the she and her in the song is actually my best friend so uh-
anyways, tell me what you thought? thanks :)