2 wat yall think of these ones?

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After first arriving in new york, charlie parker took a job as a dishwasher at jimmy's chicken shack, where played the piano nightly. listening to his astonishing harmonic restructuring, virtuoso phrasing, and breakneck tempos every night for three months, charlie parker challenged himself to adopt these qualities into his playing, and he continued to practice tirelessly.

Does anyone know how to get better at drawing? (any advice is welcome and needed)