E-mail Message - ROUGH DRAFT
DATE: March 19, 2020
TO: Jean Miller, President
SUBJECT:
(1) An increase in workers' compensation (WC) insurance premiums has been observed in our company over the past 12 months. (2) In addition, a higher number of sick days have been taken this year. (3) On March 1 you asked me to research some options to reduce WC claims and ameliorate the health of our employees.
(4) As a result, I am reccomending that we introduce an employee fitness program in several stages. (5) With a fitness program, we can improve the health and safety of our employees. (6) I offer my full and complete support with this program. (7) Please don't hesitate to contact me as soon as possible if I can help you with anything else.
(8) According to researchers, workplace health and fitness are important for many reasons. (9) For example, if employees will exercise regularly, they will improve their fitness level and reduce their stress levels. (10) Therefore, our company can save money by preventing employee sick days.
(11) Many details about the possible new program are described in the attachment, "Program Guide." (12) It is a practical resource with options for creating effective fitness programs. (13) There is also another attachment with a possible timeline for each stage of the program.
A. Writing Tasks:
1. Your rough draft is missing a subject line. Write an effective subject line that is appropriate for the Scenario described above.
2. Evaluate the first sentence of your rough draft. If this is effective, write "Correct." If not, create an appropriate first sentence.
3. Your rough draft is missing a goodwill close. Write an effective goodwill close that is appropriate for the Scenario described above.