Situation: A potential customer has asked for samples of your product: artificial flowers and trees. Because of rising production costs and shipping costs, you have to give that potential customer the bad news that free samples are not available. But you also want to get the reader to buy from you. Subject: REFUSAL OF REQUEST FOR FREE ARTIFICIAL TREE SAMPLES
We are sorry to inform you that we do not give away free samples of artificial trees. If you want to try the product, you will have to pay for it. The cost for the item you requested is $125, plus $20 for postage and handling. We do give qualified companies (yours qualifies) 10% off if an order totals $300 or more.
We also have other items such as polish for artificial leaves and vases that you might be interested in purchasing. An order form is enclosed. Again, we are sorry that we have to charge you.
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