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my creative side is writing and painting. writing is my creative side because it lets me express myself. there's something about jolting words on a paper that make me feel relaxed. when i write i can’t stop because i have so many things to say that sometimes i can’t always say out loud. words are a beautiful thing they you start a conversation, make a point etc. and when they are written down you can always keep the writing as a memory you loved and that really speaks to me. i am very good at writing in my opinion, i’m not the best all the time but, i work to get better. when i write i write like i’m away from this world and when i do i can’t put the pencil down or stop typing thing just come to my head right away. i love to write in my diary, i know people in my generation don’t have diaries but i do and i don’t like to write about the type i have a crush on this boy or whatever, i like to write about my day or if something interesting that made an impact on my life. one time i read a book and i was so affected about that i had to tell someone but, i couldn’t because most my friends think reading is lame but, instead i wrote about and i could’ve gone on for hours writing how i felt. writing overall is like a safe place, my thought, and my home. another one of my creative sides is painting, i’m not really good at it but, i like to think i am. my art to me is a story about my or feeling, i like to paint when i’m bored, happy, or sad because it calms me down and lets me have a focus. painting is very soothing for me and it lets me tell a person without a word who i am. when i paint, i paint to run away from my stress, anxiety, and problems. painting lets me create a new world for a second and live in it. painting is my emotional support and my masterpiece. you might be thinking do you paint and write to get away? no, i love my life but, there is a moment i don’t love. perfection to me is a dream but, it’s overrated because no ones perfect and when i write and paint i understand that and then it makes me happy knowing that i learned a lesson from doing something i love. my creativity comes from both my writing my painting, it also is in my personality and that makes me happy to say that

i don't see any mistakes except the (.) at the end of it. Your essay is truly amazing. Its shows your emotions and why you feel that way. not many people i know can write like this.

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they would have to clean it very clean

in the short story the slip-over sweater by jesse stuart, the main character and narrator shan is friends with grace, an intelligent girl he has known since childhood and with whom he used to be in love.

at the beginning of the story, shan believes he’s no longer in love with grace, but loves jo-anne instead. in order to buy a slip-over sweater and have jo-anne wear it so that the other students would know she loved him too, shan takes a loan at the bank.

while jo-anne is wearing shan’s sweater, his friend grace starts to wear another popular boy’s one, roy’s sweater. because of that, the other students begin to pay attention to grace and compliment her perseverance and effort. they admire her for walking 5 miles to school every day, despite the weather, and still getting the best grades. shan, who knows all of that for a fact, says, as the narrator, ‘and i knew she had the durability and the toughness of a storm-battered mountain oak.’ he compares his friend’s strength – not only physical, but also of character – to an oak tree, whose wood is known for being sturdy.

as the story goes on, shan changes his behavior out of concern for the debt he has to pay at the bank. his new girlfriend jo-anne never asks him what is wrong nor offers any sort of . instead, she breaks up with shan for not being as fun as she thought he was supposed to be. grace, however, not only asks about shan’s problem, but him make the money he needs. shan can’t but notice how different the girls are and what a wonderful person grace is.   even though he used to find jo-anne prettier at the beginning of the story, he now says, ‘grace was as beautiful as our mountain was in april, prettier than a blossom of wild phlox or a mountain daisy.’ his comparing grace to a mountain or something that exists on a mountain (such as a mountain oak or daisy) certainly has important meaning since shan loves the mountain and everything about it and he knows the mountain thoroughly. shan also loves and knows grace as completely as he does the mountain.