Read the sentence from nikita's analysis of "the children of the drug wars." nazario feels that refugee kids totally shouldn't be sent back to the same dangerous things they've left. this sentence should be revised to make it more

The sentence should be revised in order to make it more formal.

The sentence is written in a way that copies colloquial speech. However, it is not appropriate for a written analysis.

For example, the word "totally," although appropriate in some circumstances, is ambiguous and overly familiar in this case. Moreover, contractions should not be used in formal writing. Finally, some of the words used in the sentence are not very clear, such as "things." A revised sentence would look something like this:

"Nazario feels that refugee children should not be sent back to the same dangerous circumstances they have left."

d) sarah's natural reaction to being accepted into college suggests that she has no other dreams.