What question should you ask about your thesis statement when you want to refine and polish it ?

What is the problem with the following sentence: cameron, who has an extreme and unreasonable suspicion of other people and their motives, suffers from paranoia which is a psychological disorder characterized by delusions of persecution or grandeur, was absolutely sure that someone was following him even though he was absolutely alone and hadn't seen a car for miles and miles.

Me determine which are quote or paraphrase.

The boy and the wolf by james baldwin one day word came that a savage wolf had been seen in the forest. "how i should like to meet that wolf," said little gilbert. he was only seven years old, but now all his thoughts were about the savage beast. "shall we take a walk this morning? " asked his mother. "oh, yes! " said gilbert. "perhaps we may see that wolf among the trees. but don't be afraid." his mother smiled, for she felt quite sure that there was no danger. what point of view does the author use in this selection?