Read the rough draft of a student's conclusion to an
argumentative editorial.
which best revises sentence 6 to create a more
appropriate and respectful tone?
(1) year-round schooling would student achievement
(2) not so much information would have to be crammed
into nine months. (3) furthermore, the elimination of long
breaks, particularly summer break, would significantly
reduce "learning loss" and the additional time wasted at
the beginning of each academic year to reteach
previously learned material. (4) it is clear that year-round
schooling students learn and retain more. (5) the
united states is not the only country to experiment with a
year-round school schedule. (6) although many still claim
that evidence about year-round school and its link to
higher achievement is inconclusive, these people need to
open their eyes and see that students in these schools
consistently score higher on certain assessments than
students who attend schools with traditional nine-month
calendars. (7) it is about time that we replaced our
standandinafiniant nahaaluland
although many still claim that evidence about year-
round school and its link to higher achievement is
inconclusive, studies consistently reveal that year-
round students score higher on certain assessments
than those students who attend schools with traditional
nine-month calendars.
although many still claim that evidence about year-
round school and its link to higher achievement is
inconclusive, this theory is wrong because students in
year-round schools consistently score higher on certain
assessments than those students who attend schools
with traditional nine-month calendars.
although many still claim that evidence about year-
round school and its link to higher achievement is
inconclusive, they would admit defeat if only they would
do their research and find that students in vear-round