Read the passage.
(1) i think that schools should switch from using paper textbooks to using computer tablets. (2) textbooks were effective in the pre-digital age, but now we live in a technology-based society, so schools need to get with the program and adopt a modern approach to learning. (3) in fact, the chair of the federal communications commission said that "it’s time for the next stage” of learning with tablets and pointed out how textbooks are often out of date. (4) opponents argue that tablets aren’t a good choice because initially they’re very expensive. (5) the secretary of education pointed out that tablets can be updated regularly, which saves money in the long run. (6) not to mention the pluses of having the latest and greatest info! (7) many experts agree that switching to tablets is important for the future of education.
to improve the logic and flow of the essay, the writer should revise sentence 5 by
replacing the word “money” with the word “dough.”
deleting the sentence to clarify the overall argument.
inserting the phrase “are awesomely fast” after “tablets” to add personality.
adding the transition “however” at the beginning to connect the ideas better.