Ordyn has written the following paragraph for his rhetorical analysis: the kairos of the article was germane because it was articulated in pc gamer just days before the gamergate controversy was fully expressed. however, while the timing was opportune, the article seems far more relevant to legacy gamers than those hardcore mmorpg or fps gamers. unfortunately, since the article appeared first in a gaming magazine, the primary audience becomes gamers, who are most likely to disdain this message because it seems like a respective censure of them. that is unfortunate because the message itself is well crafted. what can jordyn do to improve the quality of this paragraph?