What is wrong with this sentence When working out you should rise and lower weights with slow controlled
motions to maximize the benefits of lifting

When working out, people should lift and lower weights with slow controlled motions to maximize the benefits of lifting.

Explanation:

I don't know except I think that you should add a comma. Don't trust me though because I'm not a pro writer.I just think its sounds right

the answer:

in the first part of the story running is all that matters to squeaky. running gives her confidence and defines who she is. at the beginning of the story she says that other kids call her mercury because she runs very fast. in the text she refers to herself as "miss quicksilver".

the line that provides the best evidence that squeaky has self-confidence is

" and i continue with my breathing exercise, strolling down broadway toward the ice cream man on 145th with not a care in the world cause i am miss quicksilver herself".