Kelsey is an engineering student at Lafayette College in which revision of the underlined sentences creates a
Easton, Pennsylvania. For her senior project, she and her parallel structure within the paragraph?
team are designing a robotic device to help children with
disabilities play a musical instrument. They selected the Because the recorder is familiar, children feel
recorder. The recorder has several advantages over other
veral advantages over other comfortable playing it.
instruments. The recorder is plastic, making it low cost
The recorder is familiar, helping children feel more
and durable. The recorder is small, allowing it to be held
comfortable playing it.
easily. Another advantage is that many people are
familiar with the recorder. So children feel more
People are familiar with the recorder, which creates
comfortable playing it.
comfort for children.
O Musical instruments need to feel comfortable to
children if we expect them to try to play.

Follow the directions (and example) given to create your own sonnet. william shakespeare's sonnet 130 my mistress' eyes are nothing like the sun, coral is far more red, than her lips red, if snow be white, why then her breasts are dun: if hairs be wires, black wires grow on her head: i have seen roses damasked, red and white, but no such roses see i in her cheeks, and in some perfumes is there more delight, than in the breath that from my mistress reeks. i love to hear her speak, yet well i know, that music hath a far more pleasing sound: i grant i never saw a goddess go, my mistress when she walks treads on the ground. and yet by heaven i think my love as rare, as any she belied with false compare. instructions: write fourteen lines of iambic pentameter. use a sonnet rhyme scheme. use the first eight lines to set up your idea (the octave). use the last six lines to conclude your idea (sestet). (variety may be added by including a substitute foot from time to time such as the two anapests in line 3 above.) work in small groups giving each other feedback. reading the sonnet aloud allows you to hear the words and rhythms of the lines. generate questions that will clarify the use of words and forms. for example: was the idea of the sonnet presented in the first eight lines? how was sound used to enhance the meaning of the sonnet?