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Schaffer told another person in his office to sound the
wrong alarm and that caused a big miscommunication
during the Chicago fire.
Schaffer told his assistant to strike the wrong alarm box
and that caused a miscommunication during the massive
Chicago fire of 1871
Schaffer mistakenly told his assistant to strike alarm Box
342 instead of the correct box and that caused a
miscommunication during a fire in Chicago.
Schaffer mistakenly told his assistant to strike alarm Box
342, and as a result, firefighters were directed to an
incorrect location during the Chicago fire of 1871.
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