Please help!
Where's your evidence/quote?
what are you persuading your audience to do/not to do? Right now, this sounds like an informative essay, not a persuasive/argumentative essay.
Where is the thesis statement? What are you asking your audience to do/not to do in order to solve the problem of animal abuse?
Seems like you're trying to fit your entire essay into your intro. Your intro should just have a background in your topic.
What does this have to do with the rest of your essay? Feels off-topic.

Read the excerpt from act 1 of a doll's house. helmer: nora! [goes up to her and takes her playfully by the ear.] the same little featherhead! suppose, now, that i borrowed fifty pounds today, and you spent it all in the christmas week, and then on new year's eve a slate fell on my head and killed me, and— nora: [putting her hands over his mouth]. oh! don't say such horrid things. helmer: still, suppose that happened, —what then? nora: if that were to happen, i don't suppose i should care whether i owed money or not. helmer: yes, but what about the people who had lent it? nora: they? who would bother about them? i should not know who they were. helmer: that is like a woman! but seriously, nora, you know what i think about that. no debt, no borrowing. there can be no freedom or beauty about a home life that depends on borrowing and debt. we two have kept bravely on the straight road so far, and we will go on the same way for the short time longer that there need be any struggle. nora: [moving towards the stove]. as you , torvald. how does the interaction between helmer and nora advance the plot? nora realizes that helmer will completely disapprove of her having borrowed money, so she has to continue to keep it a secret from him. nora realizes that she and helmer have the same ideas about financial issues, and the conversation brings them closer together later in the play. helmer realizes that nora is more responsible with money than he originally thought, and he trusts her more with finances later in the play. nora realizes that helmer knows a lot more about borrowing and lending, and she will seek his input later when she needs it.

If the four main points of this informational speech were changed 1. part-time job interviews ii. summer job interviews iii. college entrance interviews iv. full-time job interviews organization type would change from a. topical, cause-effect b. chronological, topical c. spatial, chronological d. cause-effect, spatial

If you had read the label carefully, you wouldn’t have bought the expired product.what does it means? a. you didn’t buy the expired product because you read the level carefully.b. you didn’t read the label carefully so you bought the expired product.