Hows my poem? The feeling of loneliness

Alone in a room full of Darkness,
There I am lying on my matress,
Thinking of a way to take away the feeling of loneliness,
Slowly slipping away from reality, its making me mindless.

Hearing the sounds of the AC,
Its making me crazy,
As if im floating in the sky,
Hearing the wind and birds cry.

This loneliness will soon make me fade away,
Its like im being blown like dust,

When I talk its like they're feeding me to a horse like im a piece of hay,
Casting me aside feeling though on the side of a piece of metal, im the rust.

For english i have to find 4 errors in each diary post

Read this excerpt from "the light of gandhi's lamp" by hilary kromberg inglis, in which she describes driving to the police station where her sister is being detained. to avoid looking at the blackened windows at the top of the building and thinking about the history of who had died or been tortured there, i always looked instead at the little chinese restaurant on the opposite side of the road. how does this passage affect the text? it conveys, with great subtlety, the conflict she felt over having a sister who would break the law and end up in the custody of the police. it conveys, without any implied moral judgment, that those who fought against apartheid considered themselves to be soldiers in a just war. it conveys, with an extended metaphor, the idea that being detained by the police in this society was regarded as a badge of honor. it conveys, with direct language, the view held by many anti-apartheid activists that the police often acted in brutal and unlawful ways.

The wind skittered playfully along the pathway, drawing leaves and bits of flowers along with it. which word gives the passage a cheerful mood?