Olaudah Equiano was scared of the slave ship. He passed out cold because he knew just by
looking at his captors that he was never going to
get home again. The captors looked different than
he and the other enslaved people. He decided
that they must be evil because of their
appearance. The conditions aboard the ship were
the worst imaginable. The smells were awful.
Olaudah Equiano wouldn't eat. He was beaten by
the men who enslaved him.
This student example uses less engaging
sentence structure. What could be improved?
Check all that apply.
It could vary the words and phrases used to
start sentences.
It could begin sentences with different parts
of speech
It could begin some sentences with
prepositional phrases.
DONE