As her sister drove Shonda to the police station, questions ping-ponged through her mind. Where had Sam and his cousin really been? How did they even come in contact with the police? What is this "misunderstanding"? Sam had never been involved in any trouble, much less legal trouble. Did she really know Sam? A scene flashed into Shonda's mind. Her wedding day. Shonda looked beautiful in her wedding dress with the long white train trailing behind it, and Sam looked as handsome as he ever had. They smiled as they recited their vows. As she reflected on this day, Shonda's heart began to slow and she smiled for the first time since the phone had rung. In this portion of the narrative, the author uses a flashback to develop the relationship between Shonda and Sam. However, the flashback does not address the questions that Shonda asks in the paragraph before it, making the character’s response in the paragraph after the flashback illogical. Rewrite the flashback scene, so it develops the relationship between the characters seen later in the story. (15 points)

The question in her mind refers to the issue of trust between the partners. So, this is how we should develop the scene with a flashback and refer it to the response Shonda had after the flashback. We know that she got calm and smiled. This brings us to the assumption that the flashback should give reasons to make her calm down. I would choose the scene that would characterize Sam as a reliable partner and a loving husband. We may leave the same setting but showcase the other factors that contribute to the feeling of confidence and trust. I divided the piece of writing into three paragraphs so that the second one is the re-written flashback

Explanation:

As her sister drove Shonda to the police station, questions ping-ponged through her mind. Where had Sam and his cousin really been? How did they even come in contact with the police? What is this "misunderstanding"? Sam had never been involved in any trouble, much less legal trouble. Did she really know Sam?  

A scene flashed into Shonda's mind. Her wedding day. Shonda, unlike the ordinary brides who would fear the groom might change his mind at the last moment, felt happy and triumphant. She had been dating him for two years and had various opportunities to test him for those qualities we normally expect from a partner in a marriage. No doubt, she could trust him.  They smiled as they recited their vows.  

As she reflected on this day, Shonda's heart began to slow and she smiled for the first time since the phone had rung.

i have learned a great many things from participating in varsity football. it has changed my entire outlook on and attitude toward life. before my freshman year at [high-school], i was shy, had low self-esteem and turned away from seemingly impossible challenges. football has altered all of these qualities. on the first day of freshman practice, the team warmed up with a game of touch football. the players were split up and the game began. however, during the game, i noticed that i didn't run as hard as i could, nor did i try to evade my defender and get open. the fact of the matter is that i really did not want to be thrown the ball. i didn't want to be the one at fault if i dropped the ball and the play didn't succeed. i did not want the responsibility of the team because i was too afraid of making a mistake. that aspect of my character led the first years of my high school life. i refrained from asking questions in class, afraid they might be considered too stupid or dumb by my classmates. all the while, i went to practice and everyday, i went home physically and mentally exhausted.

yet my apprehension prevailed as i continued to fear getting put in the game in case another player was injured. i was still afraid of making mistakes and getting blamed by screaming coaches and angry teammates. sometimes these fears came true. during my sophomore season, my position at backup guard led me to play in the varsity games on many occasions. on such occasions, i often made mistakes. most of the time the mistakes were not significant; they rarely changed the outcome of a play. yet i received a thorough verbal lashing at practice for the mistakes i had made. these occurrences only compounded my fears of playing. however, i did not always make mistakes. sometimes i made great plays, for which i was congratulated. now, as i dawn on my senior year of football and am faced with two starting positions, i feel like a changed person.

over the years, playing football has taught me what it takes to succeed. from months of tough practices, i have gained a hard work ethic. from my coaches and fellow teammates, i have learned to work well with others in a group, as it is necessary to cooperate with teammates on the playing field. but most important, i have also gained self-confidence. if i fail, it doesn't matter if they mock or ridicule me; i'll just try again and do it better. i realize that it is necessary to risk failure in order to gain success. the coaches have always said before games that nothing is impossible; i know that now. now, i welcome the challenge. whether i succeed or fail is irrelevant; it is only important that i have tried and tested myself.

the topic of this essay is how the applicant has matured and changed since his freshman year. he focuses on football. one of the strengths of this essay is that it is well organized. the applicant clearly put time into the structure and planning of this essay. he uses the platform of football to discuss and demonstrate his personal growth and development through the high school years. what he could have done better was spend more time describing himself after he made improvements. as it is, he only tells us about his newfound confidence and drive. this essay would have been stronger had he actually shown us, perhaps by including a story or describing an event where his confidence made a difference

explanation:

choice 2 i like that prompt better.