Need help fast Read the paragraph from a personal narrative.
Which is the best revision of sentence 5?
1. I remember when Ben first had the idea for a
community garden. 2. We were walking home from
school past an old abandoned dirt lot. 3. Ben stood and
stared through the fence for awhile lost in thought. 4.1
thought he was acting strangely. 5. I was walking by the
dirt lot again, and there was Ben digging up the dirt with
a shovel
We were walking by the dirt lot again, and there was
Ben digging up the dirt with a shovel.
The following Saturday, I was walking by the dirt lot
again, and there was Ben digging up the dirt with a
shovel
o I was walking by the dirt lot again, and there was he
digging up the dirt with a shovel.
O Finally, I was walking by the dirt lot again, and there
was Ben digging up the dirt with a shovel.

The correct answer is The following Saturday, I was walking by the dirt lot  again, and there was Ben digging up the dirt with a  shovel.

Explanation:

In this passage, the narrator describes experiences related to the creation of a community garden. In sentence 5, the author describes what seems to be the beginning of community garden "I was walking by the dirt lot  again, and there was Ben digging up..."; however, this sentence does not show the relationship between this event and the events previously described.

In this context, it is necessary to add a time relationship or at least a connector that shows how Been acting strangely led to him began working to create a garden. According to this, the best option is "The following Saturday, I was walking by the dirt..." because this clearly shows this last event occurred after Ben decided the dirt lot was a perfect place to create a community garden.

The correct answer is B:The following Saturday, I was walking by the dirt lot

again, and there was Ben digging up the dirt with a

shovel.

Explanation:

i’m writing a memoir and i’ve been given the great suggestion of placing a ‘sub-narrative’ within some of the chapters – sort of, what was going on with me in the grand scheme of things.

i was wondering how to format this so that it is very obvious we are stepping out the of story.

firstly is a change in font from serif to sans workable? i also use dashes for a scene change. was thinking of using a different scene-changer too.

here’s a (shortened) example:

university – or what’s known as ‘uni’ in australia – were some of the best days of my life. where else do you get to potter around in a great location, have very little responsibility, learn lots of things, do lots of things and walk out four years later with a bonus – a degree!

with my university years i had immersed myself into community of intelligent ambitious people. generally everyone had a confidence about themselves. they knew where they were going in life and weren’t threatened by others.

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next normal paragraph continues here…

(sorry couldn’t show the fonts in this comment field)

too much?

yes, no, maybe, so i honestly don't know best of luck