HELP Practice
Revise the three sentences below. Carefully read and underline any nonspecific or overused language you find. Then revise each sentence by replacing the words you circled with clear, specific language. An example has been completed for you.

Example sentence -
Before: The girl went down to the ocean and saw some cool things.
After: My best friend Leslie strolled happily down to the edge of Back Cove and gazed delightedly at the colorful windsurfers zooming back and forth.
Before: We had a fine time at the big thing the other night.
After:My best friend and I had a awesome time at the fair last night.
Before: There was this one animal at that place we passed that was pretty cool.
After: They're was a huge mountain lion at the zoo we passed. It was awesome when it swiped it's claws at us!
Before: At school, we did many neat, fun things.
After:
Clear and Precise Writing
Write a description of a place that is important to you. Write at least seven sentences. Use strong and vivid word choices (especially verbs) to help readers connect to your feelings about your place. Use the box below to write your description.