Revise this sentence to make a more cohesive statement. The average American worker is paid far less than a professional athlete and athletes are paid far too much.

-For the amount of work, professional athletes, unlike the average American worker, are paid too much for what they do.
-Professional athletes and the average American worker are paid for what they do, but professional athletes are paid too much.
-When comparing the average American worker for the work that they do and professional athletes, professional athletes are paid far too much.
-Professional athletes are paid too much for the amount of work that they do, particularly when compared to the average American worker.

- Professional athletes are paid too much for the amount of work that they do, particularly when compared to the average American worker.

I'm really not sure how to explain it. This one just makes the most sense.

hmm, sadly there is no dialogue. there is no place in the story where he is talking to anyone. it's more of just describing what he eats and where he sleeps. you have to become anne frank, give details of where you are, what other folks look like, how the environment is. have a little bit of dialogue tell of what people are specifically saying. anne frank talked about her entire household including the people, the objects, the lighting, the food they ate, and even the smell in the air. there has to be more to your diary entries, the whole story in its current state is only about peter van daan, the food, the sounds, and where he sleeps. also he seems to be writing only once a year yet more than that happened from day to day. for a friend, i can you write it out, if you want.