Ok so this is technically free points, but it would be nice if you helped me out a little. So basically I had to answer a question with a short paragraph for my daily warm-up, but I kind of went off a little bit. The question was, "what can you do to make someone else's life more enjoyable?" and here was my answer. Can you please just read over it to see if it reads smoothly, and give me any tips where you see fit?

ok ima just put it in the comments cuz isn't letting me put it in the question