What should I change? Also don’t worry about the first and last paragraph.

Explanation:

You repeated what the theme is like more than 5 times. It should not be the transition sentence as well as the start of the paragraph. Vary the ways the start and end your paragraphs.

You should have 3 pieces of evidence of your theme. Start with that instead of repeating your theme

to refer to another writer's ideas in the course of making your own original statement. when you use a summary in the course of your own writing, you must use your be used in book reviews (see chapter 8), in essays of analysis (see, nection between sentences, and you can create new paragraphs to reflect