Can someone tell me If my essay makes sense if no then can u do some changes? Someone That I know that has a heart of gold is my wonderful 5th-grade teacher Ms. Jones. I consider Ms. Jones to Be an outstanding educator for math. She is compassionate, kind, and genuine and loves her students. Ms. Jones is concerned about our education, and when a student is struggling she takes extra time to fix the problem and she wants us to be successful and that's why I consider her as a wonderful person.

1.maybe change someone that I know has a heart of gold to someone who I know that has a heart of gold

2.take out the and before genuine because it makes the sentence a run on

3.take out "as" in the last sentence

Someone I know who has a heart of gold, is my wonderful 5th grade teacher, Ms. Jones. I consider Ms. Jones to be an outstanding instructor for math. Ms. Jones is also compassionate, kind, genuine, loves her students, and concerns herself with our education. If she finds a student struggling, Ms. Jones takes time to help her student(s) with what they are struggling with. Ms. Jones also desires for her students to be successful in life and that is why I consider Ms. Jones, a wonderful person.

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I hope that helps. What you wrote, is down below. If you don't like what I did, you can just keep yours. :) Good luck

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Someone That I know that has a heart of gold is my wonderful 5th-grade teacher Ms. Jones. I consider Ms. Jones to Be an outstanding educator for math. She is compassionate, kind, and genuine and loves her students. Ms.Jones is concerned about our education, and when a student is struggling she takes extra time to fix the problem and she wants us to be successful and that's why I consider her as a wonderful person.