Good evening. in trying to write a book and i would like to know if anyone has any comments or ideas for me. the images are a bit of what ive written.

Give more detail when describing things, sense, smell, thoughts, feelings. Write as if you are experiencing it yourself and not as if your someone else watching the main character yk? Here's an example. "Outside my bedroom window was a lush green garden with flowers of all colors, red, blue, purple, yellow. Every time I visited the garden I couldn't help but smell every single flower there. I would sit on my tan wooden stool every evening at precisely 3:30 pm. The stool only had 3 legs since one of them broke off during the summer but surely it was just enough for my comfort. I look through my window daydreaming about having a wedding with the love of my life one day knowing that I have yet to experience love itself.

1. read the following excerpt from franklin d. roosevelt's "fireside chat 19":

on the other side of the picture, we must learn also to know that guerilla warfare against the germans in, let us say serbia or norway, us; that a successful russian offensive against the germans us; and that british successes on land or sea in any part of the world strengthen our hands.

remember always that germany and italy, regardless of any formal declaration of war, consider themselves at war with the united states at this moment just as much as they consider themselves at war with britain or russia. and germany puts all the other republics of the americas into the same category of enemies. the people of our sister republics of this hemisphere can be honored by that fact.  

the true goal we seek is far above and beyond the ugly field of battle. when we resort to force, as now we must, we are determined that this force shall be directed toward ultimate good as well as against immediate evil. we americans are not destroyers — we are builders.

analyze the effectiveness of this excerpt. how does it function within the speech as a whole? how does the structure of the excerpt to convey the speech's purpose and key points? support your argument with evidence from the speech. (10 points)