BRAINLIST I need help making this poem more vivid thx
This world is set ablaze
And smoke drifts in the air
Corpses in every direction
Families mourn the loss of loved ones
As bruised soldiers stagger about
And although this battle is won
It is only bittersweet
War will still persist
This world is fractured
And beyond repair

This harsh world is set ablaze

As smoke drifts in the air sufficating the sun  

Corpses in every direction pain screaming it's own name

Families mourn the loss of loved ones as tears fall upon the floor

As bruised soldiers stagger away

And although this battle is won what does that mean

when it is only bittersweet

War will still persist as it always has

This world is robbed of it's beauty and comfort

Punctured and pressed, broken and hurt

And beyond repair

"This world is set ablaze

As thick smoke drowns the air

Corpses as far as you can see

Families mourn the loss of the fallen

while bruised soldiers stagger about

And although this battle is won

It is only bittersweet

War will persist as if nothing happened

This world is broken and fractured

far beyond repair"

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i think this sounds good enough, but i liked yours

me

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