FLVS Flex English 3 (3.07 Revising the Narrative Essay) Let me know how to fix these body paragraphs. Please & Thank You.

During my whole childhood I had only one true friend name Fortunato. Everyone ended up starting to like him thus I became very jealous of his popularity. That was how my childhood went from being bullied to having an abusive father to being jealous of my friend. Years later I saw and meet up with Fortunato during the carnival season. I told him that he has acquired something that could pass for Amontillado, a light Spanish sherry. Fortunato is apprehensive about drinking the wine and to determine for Montresor whether or not it is truly Amontillado. Fortunato insist we go to my vaults. When we go down to the vaults it is covered in nitre minerals, which made Fortunato cough. In the deep vaults rest Montresor family with the motto “nemo me impune lacessit,” that is, “no one attacks me with impunity.” In English. Later in the journey Fortunato makes hand movements that is the sign of the Masons. Montresor does not recognize the hand movements, even though he says he is a Mason himself.
Montresor tells Fortunato that he can leave by taunting him. He begins to wall up the entrance to this small crypt, there for trapping Fortunato inside. Fortunato screams confusedly as Montresor continues to build the first layer of many. As Montresor builds the alcohol wears off Fortunato, which makes him terrified and helpless. As the layers start to pile Fortunato becomes silent, like he gave up on screaming for help or to do anything. Montresor fits the very last stone into place and plastering the walls closed. Then he placed the bones on the fourth wall. Finally, he writes, may he rest in peace.

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source text: from the sketch here given it will be seen, that our good grandmothers differed considerably in their ideas of a fine figure, from their scantily dressed descendants of the present day. a fine lady, in those times, waddled under more clothes even on a fair summer's day, than would have clad the whole bevy of a modern ball room. nor were they the less admired by the gentlemen in consequence thereof. on the contrary, the greatness of a lover's passion seemed to increase in proportion to the magnitude of its object—and a voluminous damsel, arrayed in a dozen of petticoats, was declared by a low-dutch sonnetteer of the province, to be radiant as a sunflower, and luxuriant as a full blown cabbage. certain it is, that in those days, the heart of a lover could not contain more than one lady at a time; whereas the heart of a modern gallant has often room enough to accommodate half a dozen - - the reason of which i conclude to be, either that the hearts of the gentlemen have grown larger, or the persons of the ladies smaller — this however is a question for physiologists to determine. add punctuation to the following excerpt. writing under the name of diedrich knickerbocker washington irving aimed his potent satire at as diverse topics as political rivals such as thomas jefferson to the very ideal of looking back on the past affectionately: a fine lady, in those times, waddled under more clothes even on a fair summer's day, than would have clad the whole bevy of a modern ball room. a voluminous damsel, arrayed in a dozen of petticoats, was declared by a low-dutch sonnetteer of the province, to be radiant as a sunflower, and luxuriant as a full blown cabbage. in those days, the heart of a lover could not contain more than one lady at a time; whereas the heart of a modern gallant has often room enough to accommodate half a dozen

the sentence that avoid faulty coordination is:

culture, which is well represented in philadelphia, plays a major role including theatre, music, and the visual arts.  

faulty coordination occurs when the writer gives equal importance two different ideas (clauses) which in fact are not equivalent. in order to correct a misplaced clause or idea, the writer can place less important or emphatic ideas in a relative clause as in the previous sentence.