The author makes the claim that "in science, they say, emotions are something quite elusive." this claim could be better supported if
a) the author added at least five or six more stanzas about his dreams.
b) the author gave more examples of successful works of art he'd completed.
c) the author specified who the "they" is and quoted these critics directly.
d) the author described in detail a few of the science experiments he'd done.