Read the excerpt from a student's essay. Which revision would help expand the ideas in the
excerpt?
O adding more specifics about the sailors' beliefs about
the island
As the narrative opens,
Rainsford and Whitney are
discussing Ship-Trap Island, approaching in the dark
distance. Rainsford strains to see the mysterious place,
but cannot, while Whitney relates how the sailors feel
about the island. Rainsford dismisses the sailors' worries
as silly superstitions, while Whitney admits that he will
be glad when they have passed the place, as he too
feels a bit nervous.
O adding the discussion Rainsford and Whitney have
about hunting
O adding a description of the island's inhabitants, Zaroff
and Ivan
O adding the information about Rainsford later going to
the island
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