What should I include in my essay, I am arguing that Bob Dylan should not have been rewarded the Nobel Prize.

Bob Dylan doesn’t deserve the Nobel Peace Prize because the Prize has been associated with poetry and literature. songwriting and poem writing, while similar with the rhyming, meters, ect. Are not even in the same ballpark. And, most of Dylan’s work is pretty terrible.

Explanation:

the sentence that avoid faulty coordination is:

culture, which is well represented in philadelphia, plays a major role including theatre, music, and the visual arts.  

faulty coordination occurs when the writer gives equal importance two different ideas (clauses) which in fact are not equivalent. in order to correct a misplaced clause or idea, the writer can place less important or emphatic ideas in a relative clause as in the previous sentence.