PRACTICING WHAT YOU'VE LEARNED A. The draft of the student essay below has been annotated by its own
writer according to some—but not all-of the questions presented in this
chapter's discussion of revision. As you read the draft and the writer's mar-
ginal comments, think of specific suggestions you might offer to help this
writer improve her essay. What other changes, in addition to the ones men-

tioned here, would you encourage this writer to make? What strengths do
you see in this draft?
My title and
lead-in are too bland to
attract reader's attention.
Would my
thesis be
clearer if I
said what
I did find?
My supporting
examples
could use
more
"showing"
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the readers
can really
unfriendliness.
This paragraph
has some
specific
details
but it rambles
and repeats
ideas. Needs
tighter
organization.
DORM LIFE
Dorm life is not at all what I had expected it to be. I had an-
ticipated meeting friendly people, quiet hours for studying, eat-
ing decent food, and having wild parties on weekends. My dreams,
I soon found out, were simply illusions, erroneous perceptions of
reality
My roommate, Kathy, and I Holland Hall on the third
floor. The people on our dorm floor are about as unfriendly as they
can possibly be. I wonder whether or not they're just shy and afraid
or if they are simply snobs. Some girls, for example, ignore my
roommate and me when we say "hello." Occasionally, they stare
straight ahead and act like we aren't even there. Other girls re-
spond, but it's as if they do it out of a sense of duty rather than
being just friendly. The guys seem nice, but some are just as afraid
or snobby as the girls.
I remember signing up for "quiet hours" when I put in my
application for a dorm room last December. Unfortunately, I was
assigned to a floor that doesn't have any quiet hours at all. I am a
person who requires peace and quiet when studying or reading.
The girls in all the rooms around us love to stay up until early in
the morning and yell and turn up their music full blast. They turn
music on at about eight o'clock at night and turn it off early in
the morning. There is always at least one girl who has music
playing at maximum volume. Now, I am very appreciative of
music, but listening to "hard rock" until three in the morning isn't
really my idea of what music is. The girls right across from
contradicts my point
see the

Which two statements are the most likely interpretations of macbeth's behavior in act iii's banquet scene?

Memories of a memory have you ever witnessed something amazing, shocking or surprising and found when describing the event that your story seems to change the more you tell it? have you ever experienced a time when you couldn't really describe something you saw in a way that others could understand? if so, you may understand why some experts think eyewitness testimony is unreliable as evidence in scientific inquiries and trials. new insights into human memory suggest human memories are really a mixture of many non-factual things. first, memory is vague. imagine your room at home or a classroom you see every day. most likely, you could describe the room very generally. you could name the color of the walls, the floors, the decorations. but the image you describe will never be as specific or detailed as if you were looking at the actual room. memory tends to save a blurry image of what we have seen rather than specific details. so when a witness tries to identify someone, her brain may recall that the person was tall, but not be able to say how tall when faced with several tall people. there are lots of different kinds of "tall." second, memory uses general knowledge to fill in gaps. our brains reconstruct events and scenes when we remember something. to do this, our brains use other memories and other stories when there are gaps. for example, one day at a library you go to quite frequently, you witness an argument between a library patron and one of the librarians. later, when telling a friend about the event, your brain may remember a familiar librarian behind the desk rather than the actual participant simply because it is recreating a familiar scene. in effect, your brain is combining memories to you tell the story. third, your memory changes over time. it also changes the more you retell the story. documented cases have shown eyewitnesses adding detail to testimony that could not have been known at the time of the event. research has also shown that the more a witness's account is told, the less accurate it is. you may have noticed this yourself. the next time you are retelling a story, notice what you add, or what your brain wants to add, to the account. you may also notice that you drop certain details from previous tellings of the story. with individual memories all jumbled up with each other, it is hard to believe we ever know anything to be true. did you really break your mother's favorite vase when you were three? was that really your father throwing rocks into the river with you when you were seven? the human brain may be quite remarkable indeed. when it comes to memory, however, we may want to start carrying video cameras if we want to record the true picture. part a and part b below contain one fill-in-the-blank to be used for all three question responses. your complete response must be in the format a, b, c including the letter choice, commas, and a space after the commas. part a: which of the following best explains why memories from childhood are unreliable? fill in blank 1 using a, b, or c. our brains add details and general knowledge to childhood memories. our brains are not as reliable as video cameras are. our brains create new stories to make the past more interesting. part b select one quotation from the text that supports your answer to part a. add your selection to blank 1 using e, f, or g. but the image you describe will never be as specific or detailed as if you were looking at the actual room. when a witness tries to identify someone, her brain may recall that the person was tall, but not be able to say how tall. to do this, our brains use other memories and other stories when there are gaps. select one quotation from the text that supports your answer to part a. add your selection to blank 1 using h, i, or j. documented cases have shown eyewitnesses adding detail to testimony that could not have been known at the time of the event. with individual memories all jumbled up with each other, it is hard to believe we ever know anything to be true. when it comes to memory, however, we may want to start carrying video cameras if we want to record the true picture answer for blank 1:

Read this excerpt from patrick henry's speech ''give me liberty or give me death.'' what is the main idea of the text