20. (02.06 MC) Read the sentence:
Fiona Jacquelyn Kaylin Maddy Katie and Eden played basketball at the Kinsmen Park today.
Select the best sentence that demonstrates the needed corrections for the sentence. (2 points)
Fiona, Jacquelyn, Kaylin, Maddy, Katie, and Eden played basketball at the Kinsmen Park today.
Fiona, Jacquelyn, Kaylin, Maddy, Katie and, Eden played basketball at the Kinsmen Park today.
Fiona, Jacquelyn, Kaylin, Maddy, Katie and Eden played basketball at the Kinsmen Park, today.
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Fiona Jacquelyn Kaylin Maddy Katie, and Eden played basketball at the Kinsmen Park today.

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Explanation:

the correct answer is a. how to make proposal that works.

indeed, the register is quite formal and the tone is especially objective as it avoids the use of the first and second person singular (i, you) and opts instead for the third person plural which is more impersonal and focuses on the data and the argument that is being developed by the author. the formality adds the impression of respectability to the work and the impersonality adds objectivity to it.

answer: this is not a good thesis statement because a thesis statement is not supposed to have questions in it. a thesis states your position on your topic. a question cannot state anything because it is not a statement. a question is a great lead in to a thesis, but it can't be the thesis.