Revise the following paragraph from a student essay. Focus on making the main claim clearer, strengthening the evidence, and addressing problems with plagiarism. You may choose to use portions of the paragraph as they are written. Underline any phrases or sentences that you copy from the original paragraph. Then use bold font to highlight any sentences you added to the paragraph. (15 points) Student paragraph:
Eating healthy foods is a really cool thing to do for your body. Healthy food can actually slow down the aging process. Foods that are high in anti-oxidants and omega-3 fatty acids protect cells and help the cells live longer (p. 20 -- Olivia Anderson, a natural foods chef). Living longer lets you do more. Ian Jones on pg. 15: "People in their 80s give more back to their communities than those who died in their 60s ever did." Healthy food means a long good life. And living longer is awesome!

What is the effect of narrator's word choice on the tone of this passage? the words "my heart shrank within itself" create a fearful tone. the words "wounded his fellow" develop a remorseful tone. the words "struck harsh upon my ears" suggest an irritated tone. the words "better-omened" set a hopeful tone. excerpt from "the cabuliwallah" by rabindranath tagore i was sitting in my study, looking through the accounts, when some one entered, saluting respectfully, and stood before me. it was rahmun the cabuliwallah. at first i did not recognise him. he had no bag, nor the long hair, nor the same vigour that he used to have. but he smiled, and i knew him again. "when did you come, rahmun? " i asked him. "last evening," he said, "i was released from jail." the words struck harsh upon my ears. i had never before talked with one who had wounded his fellow, and my heart shrank within itself when i realised this; for i felt that the day would have been better-omened had he not turned up.

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Which traits are strongest in your persuasive eassy: ideas, orginization, voice, word choice, sentence fluency, or conventions? (provide textual evidence from your persuasive essay to support your answer.)