Which revision would most improve the body paragraph
Read the body paragraph from Antonin's thetorical
analysis essay on Shirley Chisholm's presidential
announcement speech
At the beginning of her speech, Chisholm uses parallel
syntax to emphasize her claim that she is the ideal
candidate She presents herself as a new kind of
candidate who can bring an era of positivity to the US
She says that Nixon failed to bring the courage the
spirit, the character, and the words to lift us, to bring
out the best in us, to rekindle in each of us our faith in
the American dream Chisholm's stylized phrasing
underscores the incredible opportunity that Nixon
missed and that she can set right.
providing clear connections between the thesis and
Chisholm's syntax structure
adding more transitions to describe how the ideas in
the paragraph are related
using a clear tople sentence to connect the thesis of
the essay to its purpose
including several more quotations that highlight the
positivity in the speech