Can someone me add and fix stuff in my memoir conclusion? thnxs! madelyn was one the few individuals who changed my life tremendously. she lightened up my day and she was the main reason i came to school every day. to her, i had never missed a day of school. if i did something wrong and i told all my friends. madelyn would be one of the few who wouldn't tell me i made the best choice. she would criticize me and tell me what i did wrong. you might think it’s a wrong thing to do but it isn't since i changed after what she said. i took in a huge lesson a short time later. in conclusion, i learned not to judge a book by its cover but to get to know the person first. when i leave mazel day school i will remember all the lessons i took from this friendship and apply it to my adult life.

I can't really ADD anything, but I will GLADLY help fix errors and proofread. :D

Madelyn, [Insert who Madelyn is/was to narrator], was one the few individuals who changed my life tremendously. She lightened up my day and she was the main reason I even bothered coming to school. Thanks to her, I never skipped. If I did something wrong and I told all my friends, Madelyn would be one of the few who wouldn't tell me I made the 'best choice'. She would criticize me and tell me what I did wrong. You might think it’s a wrong thing to do , but that isn't true since I changed the way I did things after what I heard her say. I learned a very important life lesson a short time later.

WAIT A SECOND PLEASE!! Be sure you add information and details about this important lesson. Exactly HOW did you learn it? Coming from someone who doesn't know you, I have NO IDEA what you're talking about. ^^;

I learned not to judge a book by its cover, but to get to know the person. When I leave Mazel Day School I will remember all the lessons I took from these experiences and this friendship and apply it to my adult life.

Other than what I told you about, it looks good!! :D