In no fewer than three sentences, critique the following paragraph. explain where it could be improved. then, in your own words, rewrite the paragraph to make its writing stronger. make sure you include a hook, supporting evidence, and a topic sentence. use correct spelling and grammar. playing in the snow is one of my happiest childhood memories. the winter offers more than a time for kids to have fun. there are many things to do in the snow. it is unfortunate that so many people find the wintertime annoying. more people should step outside to enjoy the snow. i am glad i grew up where it snows.

Read the passage. (1) queen victoria of england remained in mourning for several years after the death of her husband, albert. (2) victoria did not like to be seen in public during that time. (3) she remained in seclusion in the palace and let her son, the prince of wales, represent her at most public functions. (4) she eventually returned to public life after prime minister benjamin disraeli persuaded her to do so. (5) upon her return, victoria showed concern for england’s poor and needy, which endeared her to her subjects. which is the most effective way to vary the sentence patterns in the passage? lengthen sentence 5. start sentences with different parts of speech. invert most of the sentences. combine sentences 3 and 4.