Which line would be most appropriate to include when writing for parent?

sonnet 130 follows the typical rhyme scheme of the form abab cdcd efef gg and is composed in iambic pentameter,a type of a poetic metre based on five pairs of metrically weak/strong syllabic positions.the first line exemplifies iambic pentameter.

in the shadow of war

the sentence that avoid faulty coordination is:

culture, which is well represented in philadelphia, plays a major role including theatre, music, and the visual arts.  

faulty coordination occurs when the writer gives equal importance two different ideas (clauses) which in fact are not equivalent. in order to correct a misplaced clause or idea, the writer can place less important or emphatic ideas in a relative clause as in the previous sentence.