Read the two paragraphs representing a first draft and a revision of a narrative about making a difficult choice. first draft: i will never forget the day i got my dog at the animal shelter. i felt terrible for the dogs and cats behind the glass. i saw bandit right away. he was a small brown and black terrier mix who came right to me as the shelter employee opened the door to his cage. revision: i will never forget the day i rescued my dog from the animal shelter. my heart broke for the dogs and cats behind the glass. i spotted bandit right away. he was a small brown and black terrier mix who bounded into my arms as the shelter volunteer released him from his cage. what types of descriptive language strengthen the revision?