This is for English, keep in mind I'm not done. I got poor feedback on my other other song."taking my life isn't appropriate for school" It'll be appropriate when I'm dead. Anyways, how is this one so far, and what should I change? I know you don't wanna be hurt

I mean it's clear girl

I heard The words

But to me You mean

More than the world

And I'd give Anything

To have one chance

One chance with you girl